Wednesday, February 13, 2008

Theme Week 5 Flat Bear

Flat Bear


There is a village in the woods of a far away place. The village is called Wilbery and is the home to some friendly and very special little bears.

The bears are special because although they are little, they have big jobs to do in Wilbery Village .

There are baker bears who bake the sweet breads that all the bears love to eat. There are builder bears that make the homes and other things that the village needs. There are farmer bears that grow the fruits and vegetables for the village of Wilbery . Every bear likes to have a job that helps Wibery Village , especially Flat Bear.

Flat Bear is a very happy bear. He loves to eat pancakes with honey, made by his mummy, that are soooo yummy, and fit in his tummy.


Flat Bear loves to play with his best friend Tawny bear. They have lots of fun playing with Tawnys jump rope. Tawny and Flat Bear love to run and play in the meadow that is next to the village. The meadow has some trees, but one tree is too tall to climb, so Flat Bear and Tawny are happy to dance around the tall tree in the meadow.

Flat Bear is a happy bear, but one thing makes him sad. Flat Bear can not work like the other bears because he is so flat. Sometimes the other bears laugh at him. Flat Bears mummy tells Flat Bear not to worry because he is her most special bear in the village and one day he will have a big and special job to help Wilbery Village . That makes Flat Bear happy.

One day Flat Bear went to Tawnys house to play. Tawnys mom said that Tawny was not felling well and could not play. Flat Bear asked when Tawny will feel well again. Tawnys mom said she did not know because she did not have the medicine to make Tawny feel better.

The medicine comes from the flowers on the tall tree in the meadow, next to the village.


The farmer bears said they could grow a giant pumpkin to stand on and reach the flowers, but that would take too long. The baker bears said they could bake a giant loaf of sweet bread to help reach the flowers. The other bears said yeah!!! They would be able to eat the sweet bread. That was a tasty but not so good of an idea. The builder bears made a ladder to climb up and reach the flowers. The wind was blowing so every time a bear reached the top, the wind blew them gently to the ground.

Flat Bear wanted to help but didnt know how. What could he do to help his best friend Tawny? Then Flat Bear had an idea and ran quickly to his mummys clothesline and grabbed the clothespins. Flat Bear ran to Tawnys house to get her jump rope and then ran to the meadow.

The other bears were still trying to reach the flowers on the tall tree. When they saw Flat Bear coming with a jump rope and clothes pins they started to laugh at Flat Bear.

Flat Bear did not listen to them, he wanted to help Tawny. Flat Bear clipped the clothespins and jump rope to his flat paws and asked one of the laughing bears to hold the other end of the jump rope and run.

The laughing bear started to run with the jump rope in his hand and Flat Bear on the other end. The wind carried Flat Bear high in the air, high enough to reach the flowers for Tawnys medicine. Flat Bear was a kite and the bears cheered and shouted Hooray, Hooray, for Flat Bear.

Flat Bear gave the flowers to Tawnys mom. Tawnys mom made the medicine and gave some to Tawny. Tawny was feeling much better. (The medicine made Tawny feel better.)

The bears of Wilbery Village were happy because whenever there was a job that was too high for them to do, they could call on Flat Bear for help.

Flat Bears mummy was so proud of her most special bear in the village. She was very happy.

Flat Bear was happiest of all because He and Tawny could play again. He was happy that he had big job that helps Wilbery Village . Flat Bear was also very happy because he got to eat pancakes with honey, made by his mummy, that are sooo yummy, and fit in his tummy.

THE END

4 comments:

johngoldfine said...

Aw, no, no, Marlon! No fiction, no fantasy, no fables: Creative NonFiction.

The only way you can get away with something like this is with a frame around it--a story you told a child kind of thing, but even then, I'd fight hard to say no.

Story only means fiction half the time; the other half it's something you tell a friend about a weekend, a child's first game, an incident of war, a work screw-up, a car accident, a fight, a love affair, a lost wallet, a jerk boss.....

Marlon said...

Ok, I will go back to the drawing board.

Is this worth saving, or should it feed the recycle bin?

johngoldfine said...

Save everything. Show it to someone you know who does art and see if there's a children's book in it!

Marlon said...

Hmmm...That is a great idea! Thank you. I hope the re-write is more what you asked for.